4. Intro: Looking inside from the out

For my revision piece I had chose the first time writing that we had completed in class. Under pressure was an understatement when it came to this project. I had study and study again, yet for some reason when that clock turned on, writers block jammed up my brain functions. Being dyslexic one could see the obstacles in my way. I have difficulty spelling, reading, and combining thoughts under press and might I say, it was not a fun job. So I wanted a second chance to show I understand the details of the assignment. I went through and tied my ideas into a thesis and pushed the thesis through out the essay. I changed awkward phrasing by rewording ideas. I “attempted” to nil out my bad habit of run-ons. I enrich my analysis by adding examples and providing a concise thought rather than just a summary with little detail. Defiantly this was one of the weaker writings that I had done, but after revision I feel that it is much more complete and crisp.